正确答案:
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What Is More Important: Character or Academic Achievement?
①There is a long tradition in most schools in the world, that is, to evaluate students with their academic achievement. With this tradition come a lot of problems.② For example, people find that it is not an unusual thing that many students who do well in academics seem to have poor performance in their daily life.Thus, controversy over the major concern of our education appears.
③Some people remark that the primary concern for receiving education is to enable people to earn a living. Therefore, the major emphasis in our education should be encouraging students to achieve academic success rather than anything else. ④ While other people insist that the cultivation of character should be the most important task in education. A lot of examples show that what our students lack most is not knowledge, but the basic principles of life. The cultivation of character can help them establish a beneficial value system and fulfill their self-discovery.
⑤In my opinion, our education should prepare our students for a way of life-by cultivating a set of principles that can affect all the students. Achievement in academic only represents success in a certain field, while the cultivation of character will influence every aspect of students lives and last for a life long time.
精彩点评:
①简要介绍当今的学校教育以学生获取知识为重点的现象。
②用一个具体事例说明这种教育模式存在很大缺陷。
③用Some people remark that…引出一部分人的观点。
④用While other people insist that…阐述另一些人的观点。
⑤阐述作者个人观点,并给出原因。
加分亮点:
controversy争议,热议
primary concern首要任务
major emphasis重中之重
serf-discovery自我认识
主题词汇:
academic performance 学习成绩
moral quality 道德品质
attach importance to 重视
personality 个性,品格
have a profound influence on 对……影 响深远
拓展句式:
1.It is a long practice in most school that students are evaluatedby their academic performance rather than personality.长期以来,学校都是以学生的学习成绩而不是品格来评估他们。
2.As far as I am concerned.our education should attach momimportance tocultivatingstudents’characterwhichhasaprofound influence on their future life.我认为,我们的教育应该更加重视培养学生的品格,这对他们的未来有着深远的影响。